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Post by Lawlcat on Aug 24, 2009 13:09:36 GMT -5
Name: Cherryfrost Age: 25 moons Gender: She-cat Clan: LightningClan Rank: Deputy One line appearance: Jet black pelt, with amber eyes. Smooth fur, with a scar across her right eye. Physical Description: Very high speed and stanima. She has broad shoulders, because she's powerfully strong. Personality: Cherryfrost is a brave, and high energy cat. She is very loyal to LightningClan, even with friendship in other Clans. She loves little kits, and most of the apprentices love her and wish they were her apprentice. History: Cherryfrost was born in LightningClan, but with a brother, Oakpaw. On the night of they're apprentice ceremony, he got bitten by a snake and died. Cherryfrost was a wreck without him, they were best friends. But her spirits got lifted by becoming a warroir and soon Deputy, she always looks on the bright side of things. Her mother died giving birth, and her father died in a battle with LeafClan before she was born. Goal: Cherryfrost's goal is to be leader some day. Picture: 
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Post by ~Rawr~ on Aug 25, 2009 7:05:15 GMT -5
Nice bio, but a few things. Try to make your history another paragraph (not in an insanely long one) longer, and your personality (cheez whiz adds...) a couple sentences longer. But it doesn't have to be a really long bio, like mine! Click here. AND WHY DIDN"T YOU WANT TO BE MY DEPUTY?!?! Oh well. |
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Post by Lawlcat on Aug 25, 2009 8:58:12 GMT -5
Name: Cherryfrost Age: 25 moons Gender: She-cat Clan: LeafClan Rank: Deputy One line appearance: Jet black pelt, with amber eyes. Smooth fur, with a scar across her right eye. Long back legs for running at high speed. Her tail is unusually long and kinked at the end from battle. Physical Description: Very high speed and stanima. She has broad shoulders, because she's powerfully strong. Her long claws are useful in battle, and very threatening. Personality: Cherryfrost is a brave, and high energy cat. She is very loyal to LeafClan, even with friendship in other Clans. She loves little kits, and most of the apprentices love her and wish they were her apprentice. History: Cherryfrost was born in LeafClan, but with a brother, Oakpaw. Oakkit and her grew up as close as litter mates can, they were best friends. But they're mother had died giving birth, and they're father died before they were born. On the night of they're apprentice ceremony, Oakpaw was bitten by a snake when he was sleeping, good thing, before he died, he killed the snake, saving all the apprentices in the same den. Oakpaw was remembered as a hero. Cherryfrost was mourning for many moons, but continued with her training. She did not give up, but without Oakpaw, she couldn't give it her best. But one night, Oakpaw visited her in her sleep, and told her that he was as proud with her as any brother could be to their sister who was 1 moon away from being a warrior. But the morning after got her wondering if she should become a medicine cat. But she still trained for the position of a warrior. Cherryfrost became a warrior on a snowy, cold night. Her vigil gave her whitecough. It interupted with her duty as a warrior, for she had to stay in the medicine cat den for 3 moons. After she over came whitecough, she got assigned an apprentice, a small cat named Oakpaw, he was named after her brother, and they became best friends. Once Oakpaw became Oaktail, 5 moons later, she had 3 kits with him, Oakkit, Heatherkit and Owlkit. Once the kits had become apprentices, Cherryfrost became deputy to Brightstar, leader of LeafClan, and was as proud as ever, and every day, she thinks of how proud her brother, Oakpaw must be. Goal: Cherryfrost's goal is to be leader some day. Picture: maybe i will be in your clan |
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Post by Phoenix on Aug 25, 2009 11:53:04 GMT -5
I forgot you have to do a role play example. That's new but you have to do it for at least one of your cats bios, and for all high ranking cats.
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Post by ~Rawr~ on Aug 25, 2009 14:31:47 GMT -5
Yay! Leafclan is better (no offense Phoenix)
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Post by Lawlcat on Sept 26, 2009 12:39:59 GMT -5
Name: Cherryfrost Age: 25 moons Gender: She-cat Clan: LeafClan Rank: Deputy One line appearance: Jet black pelt, with amber eyes. Smooth fur, with a scar across her right eye. Long back legs for running at high speed. Her tail is unusually long and kinked at the end from battle. Physical Description: Very high speed and stanima. She has broad shoulders, because she's powerfully strong. Her long claws are useful in battle, and very threatening. Personality: Cherryfrost is a brave, and high energy cat. She is very loyal to LeafClan, even with friendship in other Clans. She loves little kits, and most of the apprentices love her and wish they were her apprentice. History: Cherryfrost was born in LeafClan, but with a brother, Oakpaw. Oakkit and her grew up as close as litter mates can, they were best friends. But they're mother had died giving birth, and they're father died before they were born. On the night of they're apprentice ceremony, Oakpaw was bitten by a snake when he was sleeping, good thing, before he died, he killed the snake, saving all the apprentices in the same den. Oakpaw was remembered as a hero. Cherryfrost was mourning for many moons, but continued with her training. She did not give up, but without Oakpaw, she couldn't give it her best. But one night, Oakpaw visited her in her sleep, and told her that he was as proud with her as any brother could be to their sister who was 1 moon away from being a warrior. But the morning after got her wondering if she should become a medicine cat. But she still trained for the position of a warrior. Cherryfrost became a warrior on a snowy, cold night. Her vigil gave her whitecough. It interupted with her duty as a warrior, for she had to stay in the medicine cat den for 3 moons. After she over came whitecough, she got assigned an apprentice, a small cat named Oakpaw, he was named after her brother, and they became best friends. Once Oakpaw became Oaktail, 5 moons later, she had 3 kits with him, Oakkit, Heatherkit and Owlkit. Once the kits had become apprentices, Cherryfrost became deputy to Brightstar, leader of LeafClan, and was as proud as ever, and every day, she thinks of how proud her brother, Oakpaw must be. Goal: Cherryfrost's goal is to be leader some day. Picture: Role Playing Ex: Cherryfrost eyed the mouse carefully as her paws stepped slowly and silently across the forest floor. She knew she had to be sly and carefully when she pounced. She lifted her paws off the ground swiftly and clawed the mouse, killing it. "Catch of the day," She said to herself, happily. She padded back to the camp with the mouse she caught and two sparrows from before, and dropped them in the fresh kill pile. She took a different vole and began to eat, this was her first meal of the day, the warmth of the vole filled her mouth. She saw her kit, Owlkit, and called to him "Take these sparrows to the Elders, they must be hungry by now," She told him and he did so. Being deputy was a big job, but she could handle it. |
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Post by ~Rawr~ on Sept 27, 2009 13:00:31 GMT -5
Nice. I like it. Acceptederoonie!
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